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These days it is much easier for many people to travel to different countries for tourism than in the past

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In the contemporary era, travelling across the world become way easier compared to past years. In these changes, improvements in technologies
as well as
 human rights have great impact.
This
development
 is great for the economy of
countries
 and individuals,
however
, there are contrary effects too for the environment. The first and predominant advantage of
this
development
 is economic increase.
this
 is the reason why it has been promoted so much. A great example of
this
 can be Saudi Arabia, authorities are trying to construct unusual buildings to attract tourists because it is a great chance to increase funding by exchanging currency and producing hotels and products for visitors. People who visit other
countries
 usually bring with them a particular amount of money and
countries
 can broaden their budgets by their markets. The second reason is beneficial for people,
development
 in
tourism
 can promote jobs. hotels, bars, transport, shops and restaurants all need staffing.
Tourism
 can provide much-needed employment for individuals.
Nonetheless
,
this
development
 can be harmful to the environment. millions of people around the world come to certain
countries
 annually and
this
 can bring pollution, forest fire, erosion, and loss of natural habitats. Even if tourists behave responsibly, the sheer number of them can cause harm. Ancient buildings, monuments, and temples often struggle to cope with increased traffic and suffer inevitable wear and tear. Reefs and other natural tourist attractions can suffer permanent damage.
To conclude
, Developments in
tourism
 bring huge profits to the employment and economy of
countries
.
nevertheless
, there are contradictory factors for ecosystems and historical buildings. I believe the detrimental developments of
tourism
 can not overwhelm the positive ones because these problems could be solved with the great management of authorities.
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