Some people think that individuals who make a lot of money are most successful. Other think that those who contribute to society like teachers and scientists are most successful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some
people
think that
individuals
are more successful
while
others think that
people
who contribute to
society
like teachers or scientists are more successful. In my
opinion
,
individuals
are more successful than
people
who contribute to
society
you can say why and I will say the main reasons why
individuals
are more successful. The first reason why
individuals
are more successful is because they have discipline and they work harder than others and that's why my
opinion
prefers
individuals
. In my
opinion
, discipline is the main way to be successful. But there are many
people
who say that
people
who contribute to
society
are more successful and I don’t agree with
this
because teachers are not the main part of
society
because they don’t have money or authority
while
individuals
have authority. But scientists have some
success
in their lives
for example
scientist invented pills for cancer and these pills makes scientist's life more successful. In conclusion, I can say that the form of
success
depends on your worldview. Some
people
see
success
in money others in love and that’s why
success
depends only on your
opinion
and worldview.
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