Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying products (such as cellphones) or services (medical treatments) do you agree or disagree

In recent years, some communities think about
price
while
purchasing
products
like mobile phones and taking
services
like medical treatments.
Although
both things are very costly, they are crucial for the
people
. In my opinion, I disagree that
people
should think about
price
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the price
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of cell phones or medical treatment before they are buying them.
To begin
with, the most useful thing for
people
is mobile. They can do anything they want
from
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with
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this
small electronic device.
Firstly
,
People
can learn new languages or make new friends by installing applications on
mobile
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their mobile
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phone
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phones
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.
For instance
, Indian
people
can talk with American
people
, and discuss their personal or professional things without
meet
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them.
Secondly
, parents can touch with their children, and they can know their activities.
As a result
, they
aware
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about
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of
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the behaviour of their children.
Furthermore
, the elder communities can
also
spend their time
by
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playing
some
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games or calling their best friends or relatives. So, one's cannot look
on
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at
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the
price
of
such
products
whose
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that
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can help them in their
life
, and their
life
become easy by using them.
Moreover
, medical
treatments
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treatment
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services
are really important in
the
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emergency. If
people
are suffering from any serious health problem,
then
their family cannot look at the
price
of the doctor fees and other charges. The first priority for them is their family member who is injured.
Although
the
price
of
the
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medical
services
is higher, we must consider the importance of doctors in our
life
. They can only be our saviour in
this
difficult situation. In conclusion, some folks consider
to think
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thinking
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about money
while
buying
products
like cell phones and taking medical
services
for themselves. I do not believe that it will cause that
much
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many
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problems in their
life
.
However
,
products
like mobile
phone
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phones
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can help them in every situation,
while
medical treatment
services
are crucial things
while
they face some problems.
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