You were hurt in a minus accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket.Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter : * Say who you are. * Give details about the accident. * Suggest how the supermarket could prevent a similar accident

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
letter with regard to a small incident I was involved in
your
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Aldi
store
at Leila
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, Carnige, over the
last
weekend. I feel very
concern
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of
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the safety
meassurements
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measurements
that are not being taken,unfortunately, for the sake of the public who shop at your
store
. in
this
letter
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I will
ellaborate
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elaborate
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what happened to me, and I would like to suggest some steps that can prevent
from
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additional mishaps to
occure
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occur
in the future. Ever since I moved to
Carnige
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, 7 years ago, I have bought at your
store
regulary
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regularly
, mainly because of the fresh products and the
variaty
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variety
of brands, but
especialy
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especially
, because of the good service you offer to your shoppers.
Last
Friday, as I was strolling with the shopping cart, I slipt over a water spillage that was left in the middle of the floor, without any warnings.
As a result
, I broke my leg, and
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got a strong hit
at
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the back of my head. From my understanding there was only one cleaning member,
therefore
this
accident could have been prevented, If they were more team members in the cleaning staff I would like to suggest you
to
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sharpen the water spillage precautions in the
store
, and
furthermore
, search for additional team members to support to cleaning staff,
this
way the whole
store
will be appropriately covered. I really hope you will consider my solutions to
this
problem, and I wish to come back soon and
to
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see some improvements. Yours Faithfully, Emma Stone.
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