The charts below show what uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The bar charts illustrate graduate and postgraduate
students
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'
plan
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who did not find a full-time
job
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after their graduation in the UK in the year 2008.
Overall
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, the number of graduate
students
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are
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much higher than postgraduate ones.
In addition
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, it is crystal clear that most of the graduates and postgraduates continued their FE (
further
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education) in that specific year.
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, a few of the juveniles in
this
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age range preferred to do some voluntary work after finishing their study. In the
graduates
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chart, 29665
students
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continued their
further
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study
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studies
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in 2008.
On the other hand
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, only 3500 of them did some voluntary
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. About 16000
of
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juveniles were unemployed after
the
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graduation and
also
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about half of the total amount of people in
this
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chart found a part-time
job
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as a way to live the rest of their lives. In the postgraduates chart, there was just a little difference between the
amount
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of young people who were interested in the HE (higher education) and the ones who found
a part-time work
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part-time work
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. The amount of them
were
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2725 and 2535
students
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in each segment respectively. There were a few postgraduate
students
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about 345 who chose to do voluntary
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job
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jobs
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after finishing
university’s
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the university’s
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courses in 2008.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, job with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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