Different types of environmental pollution seem to be affecting an increasing number of people in the world. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what solutions would you suggest?

It is true that, around the world have a lot of
countries
with different politic and
economy
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. And it is one of
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problem
today. It is population. Nowadays, every
countrie
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country
has
problem
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for
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the
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environmental pollution.
This
problem
has
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role of our republic and it is
also
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countries
. I
reprecent
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represent
many
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cases
how it can be affecting for us. First of all, we are not sorted garbage. Many
people
have different
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about
this
.
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it
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to
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work.
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people
in South Korea sorted the garbage and wash. They have any
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of pack for the type of garbage. They
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live
in
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green life. So that’s why they
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not dot child who has a
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diagnose
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or illness. If many
countries
do
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our life will be
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and we have not
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to the hospital.
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,
people
in the
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Switzerland
has
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a
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fresh air and
theyir
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their
nature. Because when we have a lot of plants and trees our air will be fresh and clear.
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is
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photosites
.
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, it is
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effect. We usually use
a public transport
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public transport
a means of public transport
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for moving. If we think about ecological transport our life will be better. Around the world live billion
people
and in ISO
countries
every family use transport. Today Ilon Mausk invented the
eco car
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Tesla. But now he is only one. If the government buy for the
people
eco train or bus it
also
can be effective
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population
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. It
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sharply
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changes.
Infant
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was born
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healthy
healthier
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adolesment
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adolescent
adolescents
have
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not got
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a problem
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problem
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problems
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with health.
For example
,
people
in Africa died every day because they have got many problems of environmental. In conclusion, every
people
has own choice and have solutions. I hope that my solutions can help and
people
start to think about
this
.
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