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The table illustrates the projected costings during the five years in American dollars for three environmental strategies for stable forestry, whilst the pie chart presents the anticipated expenses distributed by four sectors in the first year.

The table illustrates the projected costings during the five years in American dollars for three environmental strategies for stable forestry, whilst the pie chart presents the anticipated expenses distributed by four sectors in the first year.
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The pie chart illustrates the breakdown allocation of expected expenditure for the first year as the projects are set up,
while
 the table
is provided
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 the alternations of projected costings over the next 5 years in American
dollars
 for three environmental projects.
It is clear that
 the expenditures of both West Africa and Central America are planned
for decreasing
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to decrease
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,
although
 only
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the South-east's
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South-east's
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Southeast's
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 expenditures will have experienced
a
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growth.
In addition
, West Africa represents 2,5 million
dollars
, in comparison with expenditures of Central America
shows
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show
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 5 million
dollars
 in the next years.
However
, if both
of
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states
shows
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show
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decrease
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,
whereas
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apply
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South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia is planning to increase
and
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an
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 outcomes
50
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of 50
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 million
dollars
 over five years.
By contrast
, there is exactly a half per cent of salaries,
although
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gives
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 30 per cent.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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