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The table illustrates the projected costings during the five years in American dollars for three environmental strategies for stable forestry, whilst the pie chart presents the anticipated expenses distributed by four sectors in the first year.

The table illustrates the projected costings during the five years in American dollars for three environmental strategies for stable forestry, whilst the pie chart presents the anticipated expenses distributed by four sectors in the first year.
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The table provides the projected costing over the next five years for three different environmental
projects
 in American dollars, with the pie chart indicating projected expenditure in
first
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year
.
Overall
, as can be seen from the table, all
projects
, except
South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia, decreased significantly. It’s obvious that
South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia
projects
is
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are
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 going to be increased.
For example
, in
first
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the first
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year
 the pattern indicated 30
million
 dollars, which is going to
rose
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 to
fifty
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50
million
 in
fifth
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the fifth
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year
.
However
, Central America
projects
for
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will have
less
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 costings than West Africa
projects
 in
fifth
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the fifth
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year
. There are 3,5
million
 and 5
million
 respectively. And it’s clear from the pie chart that set up costs in
first
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year
 is rated higher amounts for per cent than others.
By contrast
, profiles for both training and office expenses include roughly equal proportions
from
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of
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 the expenditure in
first
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the first
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year
.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words projects, first, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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