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Some people believe that entertainers are more important than scientist in today’s world. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #entertainers #scientist #today’s #world
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 is growing and changing
everyday
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with
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a
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 unpredictable speed. A number of masses of human
belives
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believes
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 that inventors
holds
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a
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less value in society compared to
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infulencers
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influencers
 nowadays. I totally disagree with the notion and will discuss my views in
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 paragraphs.
To begin
 with, entertainment became a basic necessity of generation in today's era because of the rapid growth of technology especially
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smartphones. In the
chase
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 of temporary pleasure, everyone like to spend their leisure time by scrolling on screens.
According to
 one study, the United
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 is home to the majority of TikTok users worldwide. Because of
this
, the artists on these type of social application became a first priority of youth these days as everyone spend their
most
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time
to
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watching their reels and vlogs.
Moreover
,
thr
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the
 performers
of
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 big stages
such
 as
theatre
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the theatre
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 and
music
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the music
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 industry, have been in people's heart
from
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 a long time even
some
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 of them are
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role model
of
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public
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the public
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 which makes it totally clear,
the
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 actors and singers holds
a
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high importance. On
other
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 hand, the growth and development the world have today is all because of the hard work and dedication of our researchers. They meant
alot
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a lot
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society. We should not forget that all the technology we are enjoying today is invented by them. So, it proves
the
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 inventors deserve more importance than others. As I round out
this
 paragraph, I encourage people to appreciate the hard work of our hidden heroes. There is no
deny
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 to the fact that entertainers
is
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also
 important but the platforms they are using to entertain all of us are
also
 provided by our scientists.
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