Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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of technology, human has already been experiencing a lot of convenience.

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this

phenomenon, many

children

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been exposed to an environment that

it

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cannot help using

smartphones

. Because of the situation, it is essential for us to

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why

this

thing happened and a positive side and negative

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exist.

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essay will explore possible reasons and personal

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on the issue. First of all, we have to notice

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why kids use

smartphones

every single day. In my opinion, it is evident that they have

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plenty of loneliness. Nowadays, a double-income family has significantly increased and

then

it is required for

children

to look for their own pleasant.

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,

due to

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, outside activities have

been

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decreased and

this

circumstance takes their friends and playgrounds.

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, it can

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that

children

opt for inevitably

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electronic gadgets to reduce loneliness. Another reason is that a lot of people are

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advantage of

smartphones

.

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data

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Korean

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rate of

smartphones

for Korean is over 90% even including 1-11 ages.

This

is because Korea has developed quickly information technology.

As a result

, it is possible that

children

have to play with

smartphones

not to feel a sense of

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out.

In personal

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, I think that

this

phenomenon is undesirable since they could lose some unforgettable memories with their friends. In the past, plenty of individuals used to spend time with their friends and

then

go outside and do play

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hide-and-seek. Even now, those experiences make me laugh with happiness and joy and

also

give

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energy to do better all of

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I have to do.

However

, if

children

keep using

smartphones

, they cannot obtain those kinds of memories. In my perspective, they could not relish a huge amount of outside

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in the future.

Furthermore

, it is harmful to maintain

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when many kids focus on their own screens.

In particular

, the case of Korean students, they are familiar with sedentary

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owing to academic elitism.

In addition

to

this

problem, using

smartphones

can cause a variety of health problems

such

as ocular pain, back pain, and digestive trouble.

Moreover

, it could result in difficulties with concentration because a lot of

children

probably glimpse into their massage or social network services on their own phones even during studying.

Consequently

, watching

smartphone’s

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screens all the time leads to

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serious health

problem

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. In conclusion, many young ages tend to use

smartphones

almost every day

since

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they feel

loneliness

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and do not want to have

a

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sense of

left

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out.

Additionally

, there are two aspects regarding

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this

issue; a positive and a negative.

Nevertheless

, I believe that it is possible to bring more negative impacts like losing

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memory and causing health problems.

Therefore

, parents have to notice their

children

’s

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. If they are obsessed with using

smartphone

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a smartphone

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, it is crucial to take apart from their addictive

behaviors

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.