Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which will causes many health problems. Sigary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

As an introduction, most of the beverages and fast
foods
nowadays contain
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amount
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of sugar,
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can be
hazadrous
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hazardous
to
health
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of the people. In my opinion, I agree
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the idea, that these products should cost more than
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healthy
foods
to reduce
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sales. In the following
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I would like to elaborate more on the topic and discuss the major points.
High sugar
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food items cause numerous
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diseases in the modern era. These products are easily available in stores and can be bought
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a low cost.
Hence
, more people use to buy these
instead
of making healthy
meals
at home.
Therefore
, diseases like diabetes mellitus, obesity, heart problems and strokes have been drastically increasing. As an example, over
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time, the availability of junk
meals
has been on the rise
as well as
the
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health issues. If these items are expensive, the sales will be dropped and, most will be changed into a healthy diet with lots of health benefits.
In contrast
, there are some benefits of using unhealthy
meals
.
Firstly
, these are readily available in
restaurents
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restaurants
, which is
cost effective
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and the time
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for
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home cooking can be minimized.
Secondly
, some people use these sweetened
foods
to
releive
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relieve
relive
their stress.
For instance
, most
of
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the
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office workers use sugary
foods
to overcome
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depression. In conclusion, currently
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diseases related to obesity are on the rise as readily available
meals
are rich in calories. So I believe, these items should be more expensive to reduce
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consumption, which will eventually lead to a healthy Sri Lanka.
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