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Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side you favour.

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Smoking in public areas
such
 as workplaces and restaurants is prohibited in most
countries
.
However
, many nations continue to permit
such
 activities.
This
 essay will discuss both of these approaches and argue why it is important to ban public smoking. On the one hand,
countries
 that have entrenched a law against consuming
tobacco
 support the idea that inhaling nicotine will deteriorate individuals’ health. They point to evidence from
countries
such
 as Bangladesh which has the highest incidence / occurrence of
smoking related
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 cancer.
Furthermore
, they claim that smoking in public places has adverse effects on pregnant women and children. A recent study shows that people smoking in public places have a bad influence on juveniles;
as a result
, they start consuming
tobacco
 from an early age. The arguments are convincing and imposing strict laws against smoking seems legit. In these cases, proponents
favoring
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 smoking believe that it fuels the production and manufacturing industry, creating jobs for thousands of people. In
this
 respect,
tobacco
 has become the backbone of the economy of these
countries
.
Moreover
, governments generate huge revenue from taxes imposed on
tobacco
 products. Needless to say, many
countries
 have absolutely no intention of banning public smoking.
To conclude
, admittedly,
tobacco
 plays an important role in some
countries
.
Nevertheless
, they should accept the truth that it is very harmful to public health. Even if the
tobacco
 business generates jobs, it cannot be supported because smoking hurts even those who do not smoke through the passive inhalation of nicotine.
That is
 why smoking in public places should be forbidden.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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