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Some people feel that cities should allow for spaces for graffiti while others feel it should be banned. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#people #cities #spaces #graffiti
Hello
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 my name is Manuel and In
this
essay
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i’ll
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 talk about a very polemic topic around the world. I'm talking about the graffiti
spaces
.
This
 topic is very controversial because some
people
 don'
t
 like to see the
cities
 painted and some others think painting walls is
art
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 and they should have their own
spaces
 to do their paintings. First I will talk about
people
 that
dont
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don't
 like painted
cities
.
i’ve
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 been one of those who doesn'
t
 like
the
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cities
 with paint
in
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 the walls, that’s because rarely looks good, with time the paint gets rusty and the
art
 becomes not pleasant to the view, the
cities
 start looking dirty,
for example
 in
mexico
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Mexico
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 there’s a street called “El Olivo'' which has a lot of
this
 paintings and they don'
t
 look good and the walls would be way better if they were completely white.
On the other
hand
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there's
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people
 who would like to have their own
spaces
 in town to do their graffiti, which I think is
alright
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 as long as they would ask permission from the government and the
people
 who live around that space. I think
there's
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 talented
people
 who do
this
 kind of
art
 who see
this
 as a job. I think
this
 a good idea
although
 I think they should give maintenance to their painting so they don'
t
 look old over the years In
conclusion
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 the graffiti situation can affect
people
 who see
this
art
 as a job and having their own
spaces
 is a solution for
people
 who don'
t
 like to see old cartoons on
streets
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the streets
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban art
  • vandalism
  • vibrancy
  • aesthetic
  • decline
  • creative expression
  • cultural asset
  • legal ramifications
  • marginalized groups
  • community engagement
  • ethical considerations
  • gentrification
  • zoning regulations
  • public space
  • civic responsibility
  • curated walls
  • street artists
  • social commentary
  • property rights
  • anti-graffiti coatings
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