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Some people feel that cities should allow for spaces for graffiti while others feel it should be banned. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#people #cities #spaces #graffiti
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 my name is Manuel and In
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 talk about a very polemic topic around the world. I'm talking about the graffiti
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 topic is very controversial because some
people
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 don'
t
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 like to see the
cities
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 painted and some others think painting walls is
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art
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 and they should have their own
spaces
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 to do their paintings. First I will talk about
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 that
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 like painted
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 been one of those who doesn'
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 like
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cities
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 with paint
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 the walls, that’s because rarely looks good, with time the paint gets rusty and the
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 becomes not pleasant to the view, the
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 start looking dirty,
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 there’s a street called “El Olivo'' which has a lot of
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 paintings and they don'
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 look good and the walls would be way better if they were completely white.
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people
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 who would like to have their own
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 in town to do their graffiti, which I think is
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 as long as they would ask permission from the government and the
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 who live around that space. I think
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 talented
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 who do
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 kind of
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 who see
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 as a job. I think
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 a good idea
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 I think they should give maintenance to their painting so they don'
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 look old over the years In
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 the graffiti situation can affect
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 who see
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art
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 as a job and having their own
spaces
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 is a solution for
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 who don'
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 like to see old cartoons on
streets
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the streets
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban art
  • vandalism
  • vibrancy
  • aesthetic
  • decline
  • creative expression
  • cultural asset
  • legal ramifications
  • marginalized groups
  • community engagement
  • ethical considerations
  • gentrification
  • zoning regulations
  • public space
  • civic responsibility
  • curated walls
  • street artists
  • social commentary
  • property rights
  • anti-graffiti coatings
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