The chart shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012

The chart shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012
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port city in three different kinds of crime from 2003 to 2012. In 2003,
Burglary
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started the
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at 3400 and rose to 3700 in 2004, four years later the
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extremely decreased to 1200 in 2008 and slightly rose to 1500 in 2009. Between 2009 to 2012, the
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of
crime
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almost
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stable at 1400. The
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of
car
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theft
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in 2003 was 2700 and almost no change till 2005.
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fell to 2000 and slowly increased
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to the same
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in 2003 at 2700 cases.
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cases started the
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at 600 in 2003 and rose to 900 in 2005.
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, in three years the
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decreased to 500 and rose to 700 in 2010, but in 2011 the
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fell to 600 and increased to 700 in 2012. In the middle of 2006 and
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the
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burglary
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and
car
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theft
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was in the same
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.
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, the
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of
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burglary
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decreased from 2003 to 2012.
Car
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shown
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the same
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year
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robbery
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experienced increased in 2012. The higher cases
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burglary
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happened in 2003,
car
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theft
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in 2004, and
robbery
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in 2005. The
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shown
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the lowest
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incidents
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in 2009 for
burglary
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, 2006 for
car
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theft
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and 2008 for
robbery
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words burglary, number, car, theft, year, statistic, robbery with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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