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The chart below show the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city cebter from 2003 to 2012.

The chart below show the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city cebter from 2003 to 2012.
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The line graph given portrays the changing rates of crime: burglary, car
theft
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, and robbery in New Port
City
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 centre from 2003-2012.
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, the number of incidents of burglary was the highest and followed by car
theft
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 and the lowest was robbery
theft
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 from a person. At the beginning of 2003 illustrate the total crime in Bulglary was higher than in others with nearly 3500. The case almost reached a peak in the next year with total incidents of more than 3500.
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, based on the report, the
cases
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 fell dramatically from 2005 to 2008.
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the occurrence inclined again in 2009 and stable until 2012. Car
theft
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 was the second crime that jeopardized the people in the
city
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. Starting in 2003, there were around 2750
cases
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 and it
still
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 in the same position until 2005. From the report, it can be seen that number of incidents decreased by 2000 episodes in 2006 and fluctuated until 2009. The crimes rose again from 2010 with around 2500 and in 2012 it peaked at 2750 like in the beginning. The robbery was the least scandal that happened in the inner
city
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 with around 500 in 2003 and slightly increased until 2005 with almost 1000
cases
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. But, the next year the vice slightly dropped until 2008 with no more than 500
cases
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.
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, the number of crimes fluctuated until 2012 with around 570
cases
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 reported in the inner
city
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words theft, city, cases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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