It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages

We have to take
risks
in our life, at some point. Some people take it
easily
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and do it,
while
some others take it very seriously and
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do it. Some of these
risks
are professional,
while
some are personal. It involves both advantages and disadvantages. Based on my point of view, I think we should not
hestitate
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hesitate
to take
risks
in our lives. People can stay in their
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zone and
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. But
this
will not improve them. Most of the time, they stagnate, without any improvement. We should stretch our boundaries to be
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better
person
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. Some
invidiuals
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individuals
are scared to take challenges, they just hide from them. But,
this
limits their success and scope.
However
, those who have reached
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their aims have done
this
well. As an example, a famous cricketer was a station master, before he joins the Indian cricket team. His family wanted him to do a government job. But, he really wanted to become a cricketer. He joined the regional cricket team in India and slowly progressed. Now, he is at the top of rich citizens in India. He will not come to
this
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if he was scared or lazy to take
risks
.
This
is
also
true for personal life. We have to take some hard decisions sometimes. As an example, if someone is spending a bitter family life, I believe he or she should
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enough to give up on it, rather than worrying all the time. People may not agree with me. But, I think
that is
a
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to make. In conclusion, taking challenges has both pros and cons. But, it has more benefits, over the adverse effects. We should train ourselves to take
risks
, when necessary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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