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Every country should produce enough of everything that the country needs so it does not have to rely on imports. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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For countries not to rely on
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import
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 they need to manufacture enough
goods
 of all that they need.
This
 essay totally agrees with that statement. I believe that producing
sufficient
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 amount of products will make countries independent from imports from other places.
In
addition
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 it will make
nations
 prepared for anything that might happen in the future.
Firstly
, when a country
do
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 not rely on other
nations
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nations'
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goods
 it only makes
the
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them more independent and they start to focus on
production
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the production
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 of their own
supplises
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supplies
. For
eample
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example
, Kazakhstan tries to manufacture as many own
goods
 as
they
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 can. We have all the main product produced here for survival. We make our own meat, crops, etc.
Secondly
,
nations
 that make their own products can be more prepared for what might happen in the future.
Furthermore
, they do not have to worry that something can happen to their importer and it will affect them.
For instance
, now when there is a war going on between Russia and
Ukrain
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Ukraine
 a lot of states suffer because they
relyed
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 on
they
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 imports. Some
nations
 were not prepared for it. Some places in Europe
currantly
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currently
 have a shortage of crops because they counted on
Ukrain
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Ukraine
, other are running
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out of
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of
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 gas because they were taking it from Russia. In conclusion, I want to say that
government
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 of each nation should do everything to provide its citizens with countries own
goods
. It will not only make them independent but
also
 prepared
for
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them for
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 accidents that can happen in the future.
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