Students at schools and universities can learn more from lessons with their teachers than from other sources, such as the Internet and television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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very important role in

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life. Some people believe the in-person study with teachers at learning institutes is more beneficial compared to the knowledge pupils gain by using

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and television. I completely agree with

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distractions. There

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number of applications

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, TikTok and many more

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usually disturb the focus of

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students do not take online

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classes

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as they do in-person classes. So, screens

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pupils towards other things on

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instead

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of devoting their time to

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. Another reason why I agree with physical classes is that It makes a good relationship of

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with each other and with their teachers which is very essential.

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learn good moral values

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as respect, support each other and so on.

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, a good attachment

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educator

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makes a pupil feel confident to ask whatever question in his mind. On

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hand, despite the fact that the

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learners

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makes knowledge more accessible to them. What I mean by saying

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instructor is not available to

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all the time and they can search

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for whatever

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they want to learn on

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internet

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- there are enormous channels on youtube which

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very good English.

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, Smartphones are always ready to answer any question at any time in

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technological era. In conclusion,

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online education is easily available

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the lessons with mentors are more beneficial because of

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distractions and more personal touch. I believe the traditional way of conveying education to

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best way.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

293 words

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Students at schools and universities can learn more from lessons with their teachers than from other sources, such as the Internet and television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

People in some countries owning a home rather than renting one is considered very important. Why might this be the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

Despite health warning, a large number of people continue to smoke all over the world. why should we be concerned about this? what solution would you suggest? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the future, all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

In some countries, fast food restaurants and companies give money to schools provided that the school promote their products to school children. What do you think is the positive and negative of this in the development of children?