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In many countries women no longer feel the need to get married. Some people believe that this is because women are able to earn their own income and therefore do not require the financial security that marriage can bring. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, most nations' societies do not believe
marriage
 is necessary for
females
,
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 because financial independence is considered prevalent among
females
. From my perspective, I believe
this
 develops leading a positive society
due to
 all the genders having more opportunities. There are already seen many distinguished
females
 outstanding in some aspect. Taking the whole world into view,
females
 dedicate to work are much more than before, they regard obtaining their single life through their own hard work to have a commitment to someone that secures their savings. Many
females
 are even unwilling to get married to prevent their accomplishment not stolen by males.
For example
, a woman CEO reach a business achievement on their own, but if she is getting married, people may think it is from her husband's family or are helped by her husband.
On the other hand
, some people, especially young adults think
marriage
 is an archaic concept these days, throughout
this
 relationship makes they give up some freedom. They prefer to have a romantic relationship for a short period rather than have a commitment with a certain person.
Furthermore
,
marriage
 in Asia is more restricted to Asian women.
For instance
, a married female needs to serve their husband's family
due to
 tradition, which causes many negative problems in the family.
Thus
females
 keep single to avoid serving parents-in-law. In conclusion, financial independence may the main reason that
females
 are not in a
marriage
, but not the only reason that women desire to take control of their life.
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