Popular events like football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this option?

It is believed that healthy multi-national manifestations,
as
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football
tournements
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tournaments
or the
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, are not only an opportunity to
relif
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relieve
tensions between countries
,
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but
also
a safe ground to express national pride without
cousing eny
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causing any
conflict. In the past, nations saw military power as a source of national pride. Armies used to march through the streets of capital cities
showing-off
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their equipment and preparation. Nowadays, even though the
phenomena
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is still alive in some nations,
this
kind of
manifestations
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are rare, and there has been a switch in mentality regarding war and nationalism. In the past century, the world suffered two global conflicts, where millions of people
loose
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their
lifes
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. After that, several organisations were created in order to
minigate
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mitigate
this pernicious sentiments
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and secure peace. Among
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theme
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, several
ones
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promote sportive events around the globe. Since national pride can not be
oppresed
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oppressed
, probably the best means to express it is inside a safe environment. Thankfully sportive venues offer
this
environment. People nowadays
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called to
chear
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care
for their national athletes and not for their soldiers
for example
, so clearly there is a compensation
mechanisms
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. Since politics is a reflection of a nation's society, if there is no disagreement between two populations,
then
I believe there would not be tension among their
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leaders
.
Clearly
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there are exceptions to
this
fact,
for
example
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old wounds and
resaintments
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resentments
resentment
seeded in the past, but
overall
the world has become a better place in the
last
decades,
also
thanks to
this kind
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these kinds
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of international events.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • mutual respect
  • prejudices
  • stereotypes
  • friendly competition
  • sportsmanship
  • cultural and national identity
  • diplomatic tool
  • informal discussions
  • political tensions
  • universal appeal
  • global community
  • shared experiences
  • excessive patriotism
  • negative nationalism
  • responsibly
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