In many developed countries, life expectancy is rising while birthrates are falling. As a result, the elderly will make up a much larger proportion of the population in future. Is this a positive or negative development?
In recent days, older
people
survive
longer than Wrong verb form
have survived
the
past, Change preposition
in the
although
there is
a fall in the percentage of Wrong verb form
has been
birth
, and the rates of the aged Fix the agreement mistake
births
people
in the proportion of population
will increase in the future. Though Add an article
the population
this
progress is good for individuals, I think that this
development would make
Verb problem
have
Correct article usage
an impacts
impacts
on Fix the agreement mistake
impact
economy
and society.
Correct article usage
the economy
Firstly
, if there are rise in the percentage of aging
Change the spelling
ageing
people
in the population rate, the number of workforces would decrease. this
is because employees’ age is between 18 to 60 around the world, and then
humans who are over 60-year-old
would quit their jobs. Correct your spelling
60 years old
In addition
, it might generate recession
or Correct article usage
a recession
slumping
of GDP. Correct article usage
a slumping
According to
the
research done in 2018, in Correct article usage
apply
Japan
mankind who are over 60 might occupy 30% Add a comma
Japan,
in
the population rate in 2040, and it would cause Change preposition
of
falling
GDP Correct article usage
a falling
ranks
from third to 10th. Correct subject-verb agreement
rank
Thus
, this
advancement would originate harmful
effect on Correct article usage
a harmful
economy
.
Another key point that I would like to emphasize is the fact that children will have to spend a lot of money Add an article
the economy
for
older Change preposition
on
people
in the future because elderlies retired
from companies and cannot obtain salaries. It means youngsters have to expend the cost which older Wrong verb form
retire
people
waste in their lives such
as the subsidy for health. For instance
, in Japan civilians who are over 60 can acquire money for their lives now, nevertheless
there is a likelihood that youngsters cannot be given the subsidy in 2050.
In conclusion, even though there is Add a comma
nevertheless,
good
improvement for Add an article
a good
people
, there would be some adverse results due to
this
development. Therefore
, I consider that this
is negative
Correct article usage
a negative
evolvement
.Replace the word
evolution
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