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In some countries boarding schools are getting more popular. Is it a positive or negative development? What are the reasons behind it?

#countries #schools #development
In the modern world, A huge amount of people, from different societies, are concerned about giving children to stay in boarding schools. In my point of view, it is a positive development and it
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 at 6 years old.
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 they have difficult
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 prefer to stay on
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 campus. The reason why
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 pretty much time and energy. On top of that, living apart makes a kid more self-confident and
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 to make own decisions.
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 need family and parents' love and attention. It is very important to communicate with mom or dad, especially in
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 that children become more responsible and kinder
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 if they live with relatives. As
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 they are happier individuals than others. In conclusion, boarding academics started to be a
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 trend. There are some cases
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 it happened. I strongly believe that
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 it is a positive development for society
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  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Advancements in education
  • Academic excellence
  • Social and personal development
  • Discipline and independence
  • Cultural diversity
  • Better facilities and resources
  • Parental pressure
  • Desire for a better future
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