It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct. There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

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Extinction
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of species become a major concern in
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world nowadays. Authorities are making efforts to prevent
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animals
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animal
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species from vanishing. Some people believe these efforts are useless as it is
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nature
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's activity to extinct
animals
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. I completely disagree with the idea and in
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essay
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I will support my opinion with examples.
Firstly
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, a large number of
animals
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are dying because of human activities
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such
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as making roads, factories and so on. By limiting the construction, a number of species can be saved which will
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prevent our environment.
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- Government should construct only one road to go from point A to B
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of making multiple
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for
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the public's
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convenience. It will
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save the money of
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the nation
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along with
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the
animals
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. Another reason why I disagree is that it can
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be prevented
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from happening by opening more zoos in
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. The category which
are
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vanishing can be kept in these zoos under
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supervision and a lot can be done to extend their generation. By doing
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, governer authorities can
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aware the public about
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the extincting
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extincting
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extinction
categories of
animals
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. On
other
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hand, there is no denying to fact that
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nature
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plays a major role
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extinct
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the extinct
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some
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of some
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animals
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. A human cannot
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anything in order to keep them alive.
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example-dinosaur's
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generation could not
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because of the change in environment. So, some deaths of
catogaries
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categories
of
animals
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are part of
nature
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. In conclusion, a human can do
upto
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up to
some extent to save
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by limiting constructions and keeping
a rare breeds
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rare breeds
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in
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under
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supervision but
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nature
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is doing its part which can not be controlled.
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, public awareness is the only way to fight
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this
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problem.
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