Some people believe that it is important to spend a lot of money on family celebrations. While others think it is a waste of money. Discuss both views. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the modern world, some individuals prefer to make
birthday
party
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parties
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for all family members in
luxury
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a luxury
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style, which need
huge
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amount of money.
However
, others believe that it is
unnecessary
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an unnecessary
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thing. First of all, people suppose
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a birthday
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is a special day in the year. They tend to
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the best cafe, club or bar to celebrate. But,
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to time they can not effort it.
Then
, in most cases,
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have
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a debt to make
party
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the party
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. The reason why is
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that
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eating out, decoration and live music may cost a lot. Sometimes parents
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on
to make
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the best
birthday
party for kids. In case, they
eager
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to make valuable memories with friends and family.
On the other hand
, some adults are concerned about bills and prices. They think that
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a birthday
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is
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an ordinary
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thing.
Furthermore
,there are
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the
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big differences between celebrations, so,
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they
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lost meaning for people. On top of that, they prefer to
spent
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wage
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wages
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to
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on
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real
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the real
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stuff.
For instance
, buying clothes, electronic devices, private transport or
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money.
Overall
, eating out, drinks, decorations plus cake are not so
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pleasant
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for them.
To sum up
, in many societies celebrations are
must-have
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a must-have
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thing, especially for children. On the other side, individuals strongly believe that it is just
waste
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a waste
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of
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and personal time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cherish
  • nurture
  • strengthen
  • bond
  • create memories
  • enjoyment
  • sense of belonging
  • reconnect
  • unite
  • traditions
  • create traditions
  • financial burden
  • priorities
  • moderation
  • budget
  • frugal
  • extravagant
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