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The presented table gives information about costs of the projects in the future five year period in American dollars for three environmental project for sustainable foresty.The supplied pie chart illustrates the expected expediture breakdown allocation for the next five year as the projects are set up.

The presented table gives information about costs of the projects in the future five year period in American dollars for three environmental project for sustainable foresty.The supplied pie chart illustrates the expected expediture breakdown allocation for the next five year as the projects are set up.
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The table provides the projected costings over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry
whereas
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 the pie chart illustrates the expected
expenditure
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 breakdown allocation for the
first
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 year as the projects are set up.
Overall
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, it is clearly observed in the pie chart, salaries will be the most
expenditure
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 breakdown in the
first
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 time,
whereas
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 the table enables clarity that
south-east
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the south-east
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 Asia project will be the most expensive plan. As can
been
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be
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 seen from the table, projects will divided into three and each of them will have
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expenditure
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expenditures
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 differently.
For example
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, Central America will
spent
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spend
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 20
million
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 dollars
in
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apply
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the
first
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 time
then
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 its
expenditure
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 will probably decrease to
the
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apply
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5
million
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 in the third and next years. Meanwhile,
south-east
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Southeast
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 Asia is going to cost 30
million
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 at
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first
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,
then
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 will increase to
the
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apply
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fifty
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50
million
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. It is clear from the pie chart that exactly half
percent
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per cent
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 of
projected
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the projected
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expenditure
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 is going to
be salaries
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salary
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,
however
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 , training and office expenses include equal proportions: ten per cent respectively.
By contrast
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, set-up costs might be only 30 per cent.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, first, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable forestry
  • environmental projects
  • expenditure breakdown
  • allocation
  • trends
  • fiscal forecasting
  • comparative analysis
  • long-term benefits
  • investment
  • funding sources
  • discrepancy
  • research and development
  • educational initiatives
  • planting strategies
  • financial requirements
  • impact assessment
  • cost analysis
  • project viability
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