Celebrities are famous for their weath and glamorous lifestyle instead of their achievements. This sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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and wealth make
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renowned without striking their achievements.
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who have a lot of
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have a great lifestyle and
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causes forming an idea among other
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especially young
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about property is everything. I do not agree with the idea the reason is that
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does not solve all human-related problems and
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has a negative impact on young
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.
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gives
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a more comfortable life and lets them crack their problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prioritize material wealth
  • genuine achievement
  • unrealistic understanding of success
  • significant effort or skill
  • glamorous lifestyle
  • negative self-esteem
  • mental health issues
  • comparing themselves
  • seemingly perfect lives
  • skewed perception of reality
  • promote positive social causes
  • constructive activities
  • positive influence
  • overshadow
  • motivational factor
  • overcome significant challenges
  • perseverance
  • dedication
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