IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

Earlier technological developments were more beneficial and changed the lives of the ordinary people than recent technology ever will. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#developments #lives #people #technology
It is argued that in the past,
technologies
 were developed and they were more handy than today's ones,
Moreover
 they affected common
people
's
life
. I agree with
this
 idea because
technology
Replace the word
technological
show examples
 evolution impacted widely
people
's
life
 in the past. The essay will be discussed how to change and be useful for individuals'
life
 than today's. Hundred
years
Change preposition
of years
show examples
 ago,
people
 lived commonly. They did many different chores by hand. It was difficult to live without technology. Later, scientists invented various techniques for
people
 in order to inhabit easily.
For example
, electricity was the most important invitation in the world. After
then
 most of the
technologies
 were created by inventories.
Such
 as a bulb, a telephone, a television a computer and so on. All of them improved human beings'
life
.
Moreover
Add a comma
,Moreover
show examples
 many industries of the countries were developed by
technologies
. Presently,
majority
Correct article usage
the majority
show examples
 of the
technologies
 are being improved by scientists.
In addition
, nowadays it is difficult to live without
technologies
Fix the agreement mistake
technology
show examples
 because they help
people
's work.
For instance
, computers are essential gadgets for humans. Especially a person who works somewhere.
People
 use
technologies
Fix the agreement mistake
technology
show examples
 for various purposes. Without
computers
Add a comma
,computers
show examples
 human beings cannot do anything. They help us to do things easily. Presently
technologies
 are developed because of the past ones. In conclusion, in the past
technologies
 were being developed by humans
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
so as to improve their
life
. I agree with
this
 idea that without past
technologies
 we cannot do anything now.
Submitted by dilshod333d on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: