It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

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people
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with
a specific
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a specific talent
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talents
such
as sportsmen or good
musician
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.
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some
people
argue that
talents
can get by practice or hard work. In
this
essay I will discuss both sides of
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arguments
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and give my opinion. On the one
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many
people
in the global believed that
talents
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with
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children since they was born because some
people
have
a
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fastest learning in something
such
as sports,
musician
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musicians
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or education.
Furthermore
the research about
genetic
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can provide information about children
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was
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born with a gift because
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form
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their parents has given a specific
talents
.
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Messi is
football
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player in PSG because he has a special gene in his chromosomes and
then
, he is becoming a
play maker
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.
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However
in my opinion some
people
have
a
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a talent
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talents
but they don’t have
ambition
and
practicing
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, they can not become
a
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good
in
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sport,
musician
or education.
On the other hand
, some
people
argue that
people
don’t have
a
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talents
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talents
innate with
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born.
Practicing
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and hard work are
important
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more important
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than
talents
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further more
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when
people
have
a
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ambition
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in
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something, they want to practice or
training
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.
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example
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my father hasn’t a talent to play
a music
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music
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so he spend time
to practice
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practicing
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and
then
, he has become a
musician
.
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result
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when
people
have
a
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an
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ambition
people
can do
in
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something,
talents
are not
important
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more important
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than
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practicing
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practising
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or training. In conclusion, some
people
born
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are born
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with
a
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talents
a talent
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talents
from their
genetic
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,
How ever
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I assumed
people
have
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who have
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ambition
can get
a
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apply
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talents
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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