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Some people believe that social media platform have a negative impacts. And some people argue that social media have a positive influence. In my opinion I do not completely agree social media have negative impacts, and the following examples will be provide information support my point of view.

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Introduction
Social
media
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 have
a
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apply
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negative impacts and positive impacts.
People
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 can use social
media
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platform
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platforms
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 to harm
another
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other
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people
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 and
then
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, they can post
a
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negative
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contents
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content
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such
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 as sex
contents
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drug
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or drug
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contents
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 on their
Facebook
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 or
Twitter
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For example
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twitter
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 has too many accounts to make a porn video and
then
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, they can make
money
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 following by
people
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 are under 18 years old can access to negative accounts on
twitter
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.
As a
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result
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 every government
in
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global
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 should make a new law to control social
media
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platform
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platforms
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Body
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 argue social
media
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platform
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 is a positive to
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.
Facebook
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 and
Twitter
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 are a worldwide application, and
then
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 almost
people
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 have an
accounts
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account
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. They can make
money
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 from
Facebook
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,
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and Twitter
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 because social
media
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platforms
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are
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advertise following by
people
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can
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who can
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 access
to
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contents
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content
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, goods and
service
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services
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. Nowadays social
media
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platforms
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 are the best marketing. For the instants students in university want to sell their product. They should
Facebook
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 and
Twittter
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Twitter
 to make a marketing and,
then
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 they can make
people
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 on social
media
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platforms
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 to know their product.
As a result
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, Social
Media
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platforms
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 are a
goods
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 way to build
a
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marketing and business. They can make
a
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money
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form
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from
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 social
media
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platform
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platforms
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Conclusion
In conclusion, Social
media
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platform
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platforms
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 have
a
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apply
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negative and positive impacts. Depend on
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People
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whether People
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 use social
media
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to
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in
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negative
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a negative
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 or positive way. In my
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view
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views
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,views
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 Social
media
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platforms
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 are
positive
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a positive
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 impact than
negative
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a negative
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 impact.
People
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 can contact
to
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another person
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other people
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 and easy to make content and marketing and
then
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, they can make
money
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.

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