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The map below describes changes to a park in 1980 and now.

The map below describes changes to a park in 1980 and now.
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The given map portrays the remake of a
park
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 in 1980 and today.
Overall
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, there were only two gates in the old
park
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 with just a few benches,
while
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 today's
park
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 is full of many facilities to enjoy the
park
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. In 1980, the property provided one way with two gates for the visitor to come in. In the left
area
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, the
park
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 furnishes three benches around the pond
area
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 surrounded by some flowers. On the other side, there were full of various plants. Fortunately, there are numerous improvements in the
park
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 these days. It can be seen in every
area
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 of
this
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 place. In the new
park
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, the bench is increased around the pond and the flowers changed to the bush.
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, the biggest makeover in the
park
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 is on the right side with provided some areas for people to picnic since there are some chairs, desks, and barbecue tools. There is
also
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 a child-friendly
area
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 named the playground.
Besides
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 that,
new
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the new
a new
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park
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 has four main entrances allowing visitors to look around in each
area
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 of the
park
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformed
  • expanded
  • renovated
  • upgraded
  • revamped
  • refurbished
  • install
  • addition
  • increase
  • enhance
  • improve
  • introduce
  • upgrade
  • create
  • development
  • facilities
  • recreational areas
  • wildlife habitats
  • pathways
  • walkways
  • seating areas
  • lighting arrangements
  • ponds
  • lakes
  • sports facilities
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