Many teenagers believe becoming social media influencers is a good career choice. However, other insist that there are some major drawbacks related to an influencer career. Discuss both views.

Social media makes a person become a celebrity overnight because of the audience
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responsible to make that particular video or
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clip viral. It is argued by most of them that youth became believing that trendsetting is a proper profession to continue
whereas
some
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others
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point out that it has its own demerits. Let's discuss both
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views in the below paragraphs.
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, many people started shooting videos and uploading them on social media platforms so as to get liked by the audience.
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havoc nothing limited to the age itself. One needs just a camera and a tripod to shoot it under some guidance.
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, in turn, getting all seen worldwide by all the age groups. The content chosen by them should be attractive enough.
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by the audience and the amount of likes decides the pay.
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, a
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girl has shared some clips and got an income
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morning to evening.
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people greedy on getting rich instantly and easily.
Secondly
, some videos with harsh content
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very dangerous
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the
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subconscious
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adolescents. It makes them rude
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their guardians with an act of misguidance.
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practice of making short cinema affects the academics of the minors, which, in turn,
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for
henious
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heinous
acts in future. The outcome is very bad and it is making them very greedy enough
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the
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shortcuts in life.
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loses the capacity of self-motivation and
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hard work
hard-work
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To conclude
, social media influencers
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sometimes
brings
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great profits
while
with some people it's
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a loss
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of
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and well-being. It has its own demerits with low
sustainance
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sustenance
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