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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The line graph illustrates the mean emission of
carbon
dioxide
 by every person from 1967 to 2007 in
UK
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the UK
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,
Sweden
, Italy and
Partugal
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Portugal
.
Overall
, the
production
 of
carbon
dioxide
 over
given
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a given
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 period in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and
Sweden
.
while
this
 emission increased from 1967 to 2007 in Italy and Portugal. In the final year,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom emitted
highest
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the highest
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 amount of
carbon
dioxide
 but
Sweden
 and Portugal released
minimum
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the minimum
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 amount of
this
 gas. In
UK
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the UK
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, above ten metric
tonnes
 of
carbon
dioxide
 was
producted
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produced
 in 1967 and
this
 emission
was
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decreased dramatically over time and in 2007, it was reduced to above 8 metric
tonnes
. In
Sweden
, the
production
 of
carbon
dioxide
 was approximately 9 metric
tonnes
 which rose
up
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to 10 metric
tonnes
 in 1977 and
then
 started decreasing and in 2007,
it's
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its
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production
 was
closed
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 to 5 metric
tonnes
. In 1967, Italy and Portugal had emitted
carbon
dioxide
 upto 4 and approximately 1 metric
tonnes
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tonne
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 respectively which began to rise and in 2007, the
production
 of
carbon
dioxide
 was near to 8 and 6 metric
tonnes
 for Italy and Portugal respectively but the change was that Portugal had emitted lowest amount of
carbon
dioxide
.
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