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The graph below shows how much money a city council gave to book clubs over a four-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows how much money a city council gave to book clubs over a four-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The graph gives information about the
amount
 of
money
, that the city
council
 gave to book clubs during
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the 4-yearyear
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4-yearyear
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4-year year
4-year-year
 term. In the first
year
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 the donation in the quantity of 21 000 was given by the
council
. For the following
year
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,year
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 the
amount
 of
money
 continued to grow, despite that there was a slight decrease in
club
members
. The number of people in book clubs between the first and second
year
 falls from 6000 to 5000
members
. In
the
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year
 3, the
amount
 of
money
 the
council
 spent shorted up. It reached a peak of 40,000£. At the same period of
time
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 there was a gradual increase in the number of book
club
members
. During the
last
year
amount
 of
money
 fall slightly and reached the figure of 35,000£.
However
, the population of
club
members
 did not stop growing.
To conclude
, the graph shows an upward Trent for the number of
club
members
, even with the decline in
money
 that the
council
 spent in
year
 4.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money, council, year, club, members with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "falls" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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