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The graph below shows how much money a city council gave to book clubs over a four-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows how much money a city council gave to book clubs over a four-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph gives information about the
amount
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 of
money
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, that the city
council
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 gave to book clubs during
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the 4-yearyear
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4-yearyear
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4-year year
4-year-year
 term. In the first
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year
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,year
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 the donation in the quantity of 21 000 was given by the
council
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. For the following
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year
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 the
amount
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 of
money
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 continued to grow, despite that there was a slight decrease in
club
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members
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. The number of people in book clubs between the first and second
year
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 falls from 6000 to 5000
members
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. In
the
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year
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 3, the
amount
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 of
money
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 the
council
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 spent shorted up. It reached a peak of 40,000£. At the same period of
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 there was a gradual increase in the number of book
club
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members
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. During the
last
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year
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amount
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 of
money
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 fall slightly and reached the figure of 35,000£.
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, the population of
club
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members
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 did not stop growing.
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, the graph shows an upward Trent for the number of
club
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members
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, even with the decline in
money
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 that the
council
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 spent in
year
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 4.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money, council, year, club, members with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "falls" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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