The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The graph illustrates changes in the number of access to two
music
sites (
Music
Choice
and Pop Parade) in 15
days
. As can be seen from the graph, both the websites’ figures experience a fluctuation and end up having higher visits than at the beginning of the period.
However
, it is the
Music
Choice
that undergoes more significant changes
overall
.
To begin
with,
Music
Choice
receives remarkable access
initially
at nearly 120 times. After that, it oscillates in a downward trend and reaches a low of 40 6
days
later.
However
, on day 11, the figure surges dramatically at 140 times, and despite falling again between 80 and 100 visits on day 13, it
finally
peaks at 160 views. Regarding Pop Parade, the site has a more humble start than
Music
Choice
at only 40 visits and spikes at 60 viewers on day 3. In the next 8
days
, the number fluctuates around 20 to 40 views.
However
, within 2
days
later, it soars rapidly to 120,
then
ends at 70 access by the end of the time span.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words music, choice, days with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Music sites
  • Web traffic
  • Number of visits
  • Trend analysis
  • Initial phase
  • Steady increase
  • Fluctuations
  • Significant change
  • Peaks
  • Turning point
  • Growth rate
  • Seasonal variation
  • Comparative analysis
  • Long-term trend
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