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sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and give your own opinion..

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in
this
 video, an architect ( a woman ), who was educated in Switzerland and China, compares the architecture of Europe and Asia. As an example for the Asian side, she choose Chinese designers, because they don't think about a career or becoming famous( even though, only counted number of people know them by their name )
while
 European draughtsmen consider writing their names in history ( and most of them are well-known
such
 as Michelangelo or Palladio). At the same time,she mentioned the differences even in their sketches and ideas.
However
, in China, architects want to make it convenient not only for people's lives but
also
 for the balance of nature and show their respect
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 the traditions.
In contrast
 , in Europe, they mostly concentrate on the design of the buildings.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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