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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #books #imagination #language #skills #tv
Today there are a lot of ecological problems, like air
pollutions
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, terrible disasters, disappeared or endangered populations of animals and plants, because humans don’t care about nature. We have to do something with
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. Some decisions of
this
 problem were described in
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first,
recycling is a really great help
for
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 our nature. If we use paper, plastic, glass, tin and other litter more than one time, our planet will be saved. Recycling should be developed by people in the future.
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second,
we ought to use bicycles and walk. There are two great advantages for humans and for Earth. People could become healthier and stronger and
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 could become fresher
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 if we had an opportunity of using bicycles and walking.
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third,
we could send money to
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organization
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. Maybe it is the easiest thing, that every person can do. If we spent some money, we could help
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endangered animals and plants, polluted areas and
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 Ocean. There are a lot of ways of saving nature, but we can’t work together. That’s the problem of all humanity.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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