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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples flom your own knowledge or experience.

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These days a significant number of
children
 devote a considerable amount of
time
 to their
gadgets
,
such
 as smartphones, laptops, tablets or even smartwatches. I know for a fact that it is one of the most controversial issues today,
consequently
, In
this
 essay, I am going to examine
this
 question and provide my
point
 of
view
.
To begin
 with, recently, I read a truly interesting article in the New York Magazine, where the author provided contemporary information regarding that issue and compared two diametrically opposite points of
view
 from their own survey which contained information
according
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 the advantages and drawbacks of
children
's growing up with a substantial variety of
gadgets
. The first bunch of people told that it is complicated to reduce the
children'sscreen
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children screen
time
,
notwithstanding
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while
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 the second group speculated about
gadgets
' values. The former elucidated their
point
 of
view
 in an interesting way: they decide that their
children
 still struggling with screen
time
,
however
 nowadays it is more than unrealistic because we cannot disapprove
the
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 importance of gaining knowledge. On account of complex political issues and lockdowns around the entire world, it is not real to provide full-
time
 study for
children
 and adolescents. The second part of people found a number of pros,
such
 as utilising interactive smartphone plays, gaining knowledge about modern technology, and imaginative development. The weighting of all statements and circumstances and speculating about Weighting of all statements and circumstances and speculating about my own
point
 of
view
, I want to emphasise that I agree with two groups of people up to the
point
, because I believe that parents need to know the appropriate measure of devoting
time
 to
gadgets
, without a shadow of a doubt, and it is essential for parents to ensure
children
 with the knowledge, understanding and attitudes.
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