In many parts of the world, families were larger in the past because people had more children. Do you think there were more advantages or disadvantages to being part of a large family in the past? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
In the past, extended family had a lot of
children
. In that family, all the siblings were kind and loyal to each other. The reason I am saying that is
because my old grandparents came from extended
family. In Correct article usage
an extended
this
essay, I will discuss positive
aspects and negative sides.
On the one hand, being the eldest child in an extended family, required more responsibility than being the youngest child. Correct article usage
the positive
For instance
, the older children
shared all of the valid clothes and suitable shoes with the youngest children
. Furthermore
, the family environment was healthy, merciful to each other, helper
when needed. In an extended Replace the word
and helpful
family
the Add a comma
family,
children
were helper
for domestic chores and field Fix the agreement mistake
helpers
works
because of budget came from Fix the agreement mistake
work
this
work. In addition
, the children
of this
family treated each other nicely and the older ones helped to teach new skills to the youngest ones. There were
no wickedness around Change the verb form
was
this
people in the past.
But Correct determiner usage
these
on the other hand
, there are also
many disadvantages. Such
as,
groceries, financial deficiencies, clothes, Remove the comma
apply
problems
in the delivery of school supplies and there were similar family budget deficit problems
. In the past days, health was one of the biggest gift
which is given by God. If one of the extended family Change to a plural noun
gifts
member
gets Change to a plural noun
members
a flu
, sometimes they could Change the article
the flu
flu
have been
afford to buy medicine but it was not always. The teenagers of the extended family Verb problem
apply
got
a place at universityWrong verb form
get
rarely
. Rephrase
apply
Due to they
helped Change preposition
They
to
their parents with field Change preposition
apply
works
. There was no time to study.
In conclusion, every Era has a past. The Fix the agreement mistake
work
problems
of big families in the past were also
big. However
nowadays, problems
of extended families are getting smallerSubmitted by omondavlat91 on
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task response
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your position on the topic and outlines the main points to be discussed in the essay.
coherence cohesion
Work on connecting your ideas in a more organized and logical manner. Use transition words and phrases to link your ideas together more effectively.