In many part of the world, families were larger in the past because people had more children

Almost everywhere in the world , families were larger , if who had more kids . I think , there are many advantages
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family. I believe that being part of
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extended family is great .
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, they can be nice to each other .
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they share their
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with one another
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any kind of
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together.
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how to cook very well .
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family can mean
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having fun . Even if there are more children in a family, they can not
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.
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, vast families might celebrate holidays memorable. Owning to the fact that something can happen
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events which is funny .
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family
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has some disadvantages too.
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major disadvantage of that parents have to make a lot of money and they will
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money
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support
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. The reason is that they have to provide different stuff to their kids .
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, I still believe that there are more
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advantages
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family
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because they can help each other any moment of time
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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