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Environmental issues have always been an international problem because governments are not imposing harsh punishments againts offender? To what extent do you agree or dis agree? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.

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Environmental
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 began and surged to
an
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 global issue after the greatest humankind technical advancement which is
industial
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industrial
 evolution.
However
, in recent years, various
controveries
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controversies
 have emerged as to whether the government's inability and weak punishments against
the
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eco-related crimes aggravate
the
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global warming. In my viewpoint, I totally disagree with the
arguements
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arguments
 above, and I will outline some reasons with examples in the real world to support my ideas. First and foremost, most of the developed and developing
countries
 abide by the statement and indication released by
UN
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,
while
 only a few developing
countries
such
 as China and India still reap the benefits by using their developing
countries
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countries'
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identity
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identities
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 which they actually achieve the standard to be
recgonized
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recognized
recognised
 as developed
countries
.
Thus
, the majority of the
countries
 around the world keep their
pollutions
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pollution
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 and
wastes
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waste
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 below the rules, despite China and India should be rearranged
about
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their level by
UN
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the UN
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.
Secondly
,
according to
 the research from the most well-known ecological related
journal-Nature
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journal Nature
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, the ecological issues around the world are gradually under control by
UN
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the UN
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 and
also
 the developed
countries
. Thanks to the synergy efforts of every
governments
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government
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 and the state-of-the-art technology of sustainable energy, the impact of
the
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environmental issues
are
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is
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 projected to be half as many as now in 2050. In
conciusion
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conclusion
,
although
 the government serve
as
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the most imperative role
of
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in
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the
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environmental issues, It doesn't means every
repercussions
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repercussion
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 should be attributed to the government.
Last
 but
vital
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vitally
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 important, conserving our planet is
alway
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always
 the responsibility of everyone on
earth
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Earth
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;
instead
 of blaming the
governments
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government's
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 effort, we should protect our planet
by
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 our own actions.
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