Many manufacturing food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree.

Today high levels of
sugar
are contained in many sources of
food
, especially in manufacturing
food
. And, of course, eating so much
sugar
is not good for our health; it can cause just a simple cavy,
for example
, but
also
worse problems, like the increasing level of
sugar
in the blood. Some
people
suggest that sugary products should be more expensive, so
people
would buy less of them.
According to
me, I think that
this
solution is not the best one as sugary products include some type of
food
that we eat every day,
such
as bread or pasta. These foods, particularly the first one, are really important in our diet, so making them more expensive will influence not only our lifestyle but
also
some
people
wouldn’t be able anymore to buy the most important
food
for them. Just think
for example
poor
people
, who can maybe afford a few loads of bread per day. What would they eat if we increased the bread price? I think that the best solution to
this
problem would be informing
people
about what they eat because sometimes we don’t even know that. They have already done something to inform
people
about the characteristics of
food
, of ,course and labels are one of the most important things as they tell you all the ingredients of a particular
food
. Yet, not many
people
spend some of their time reading levels, or if they do , they probably don’t know the biggest part of the substances named in the list, as well not everybody knows that there is a specific order of the ingredients in the list. So something we could do is organise some ‘’talks’’ to inform
people
not only about the function of levels
,
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but especially about the big amount of
sugar
we eat every day. I think as well that these talks should be organized
also
in schools because
also
children must be aware of what they eat;
besides
, children can tell what they have learned from these conferences to their parents, so the whole family would eat better. To sum it up, I think that it is not necessary to increase the prices of sugary
food
and that all we need is information, that will lead
people
to eat less sugary
food
and
as a consequence
, live better with fewer problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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