Many manufacturing food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree.

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Today high levels of

sugar

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are contained in many sources of

food

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, especially in manufacturing

food

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. And, of course, eating so much

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is not good for our health; it can cause just a simple cavy,

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, but

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worse problems, like the increasing level of

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in the blood. Some

people

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suggest that sugary products should be more expensive, so

people

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would buy less of them.

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me, I think that

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solution is not the best one as sugary products include some type of

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that we eat every day,

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as bread or pasta. These foods, particularly the first one, are really important in our diet, so making them more expensive will influence not only our lifestyle but

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some

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wouldn’t be able anymore to buy the most important

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for them. Just think

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poor

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, who can maybe afford a few loads of bread per day. What would they eat if we increased the bread price? I think that the best solution to

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problem would be informing

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about what they eat because sometimes we don’t even know that. They have already done something to inform

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about the characteristics of

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, of ,course and labels are one of the most important things as they tell you all the ingredients of a particular

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. Yet, not many

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spend some of their time reading levels, or if they do , they probably don’t know the biggest part of the substances named in the list, as well not everybody knows that there is a specific order of the ingredients in the list. So something we could do is organise some ‘’talks’’ to inform

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not only about the function of levels

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but especially about the big amount of

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we eat every day. I think as well that these talks should be organized

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in schools because

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children must be aware of what they eat;

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, children can tell what they have learned from these conferences to their parents, so the whole family would eat better. To sum it up, I think that it is not necessary to increase the prices of sugary

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and that all we need is information, that will lead

people

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to eat less sugary

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and

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, live better with fewer problems.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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389 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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Some people say thw history is one of the most ....

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