A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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I partially agree with the statement relating to
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person's
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a person's
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value prosperity of
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of
characteristic
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the characteristic
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of that particular
person
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.
Firstly
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, it seems that
person
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's social status and wealth are visible.
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,
privileged
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a privileged
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person
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well-dressed
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acquired
net worth. Meanwhile,
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to
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the lower
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lower class
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group has to work overtime just to get
standard
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a standard
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wage, which is far lower
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than
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what rich
people
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have. Outdated values
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as goodness, respect and other basic manner
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to not
seen
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, unless, it is published in
publicsphere
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public sphere
. In fact,
people
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with high school status have more capacity to publicly inform
kindness
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that
have
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been done.
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, most charity events are carried out by wealthy
people
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. By having
power
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the power
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to broadcast good things that have been done, rich
people
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gain respect easily and are seen as beneficial parties who can be taken advantage
at
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by opportunistic
people
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.
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, abandoned that including
kindness
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and trust are still as important as it used to be valued.
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,
present
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the present
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community
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communities
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tend to be lured by
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the tangible
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advantages
to
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of
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money and material.
Nowaday
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,
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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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also
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like to be recognized.
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material is much more important in public
eyes
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compared to
kindness
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.
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,
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the economic
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economic
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has changed rapidly,
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this
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is likely to be one of the reasons why
people
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pursue
for
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more financial support. It is believed that genuine
kindness
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can grow back despite all of
social
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the social
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media content
that is
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sometimes manipulative. All in all, social status and wealth might be every
person
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's priority in
this
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rapidly changing world.
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, honour,
kindness
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and trust can be restored
eventhough
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even though
difficulty might be happening
due to
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manipulation in
this
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digitalization era.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social status
  • material possessions
  • old-fashioned values
  • honour
  • kindness
  • trust
  • empathy
  • media influence
  • self-worth
  • metrics of success
  • financial achievements
  • community contributions
  • superficial connections
  • emotional bonds
  • life satisfaction
  • stress and anxiety
  • policy changes
  • community programs
  • restoring balance
  • personal character
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