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Certain people believe that the only way to reduce crime sentencing criminals for longer time periods, while others believ alternative methods should be used to lower crimes. Discuss both vieve and give your opinion

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It is argued that
somes
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some
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crime
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criminals
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for criminals
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 helps to improve their
behavior
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behaviour
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,
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however
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 others believe that it is correct to alter another principle to relieve
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. In my opinion,
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according to
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committing should
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be sentenced
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. The essay will discuss these ideas and provide
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relevant answers to
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. Nowadays numerous crimes are offended by criminals in order to achieve their goals or a person who commits by mistake. Most
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the
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individuals claim that
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 should reduce
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 of the punishment time.
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, some
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. After
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offense
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 they regret
from
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their
crime
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. Presently young
people
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 happen the same
troubles
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.
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 as teenagers and young
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. Even though women commit crimes, they have babies. I think that the
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 should reduce in the same situation. It can help not to offend
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 by them. Another reason is that some
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occurred
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 on purpose. They deliberate their
crime
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 for a long time
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 they know that it is bad for their life.
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, they know that they ought not to occur these
troubles
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. It may be dangerous for someone's life.
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crime
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 courts should
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.
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other
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 hand, some
of
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the
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people
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 believe that
government
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 and courts ought to find another way to reduce
crime
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. I am certain that
this
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 idea can relieve the situation. Because the person who
occur
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offense
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 will deeply regret her or his trouble after forgiveness from
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. They never commit so as
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 about
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this
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troubles
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. In conclusion, many
of
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the
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people
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 think that criminal punishment should reduce
however
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somes
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some
 consider that
authorities
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 ought to find another relevant alternative way. I am certain that courts should be
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according to
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 crimes. I have tried to relevant answers to the questions.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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