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Certain people believe that the only way to reduce crime sentencing criminals for longer time periods, while others believ alternative methods should be used to lower crimes. Discuss both vieve and give your opinion

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It is argued that
somes
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some
 think about reducing
crime
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criminals
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 helps to improve their
behavior
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,
however
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 others believe that it is correct to alter another principle to relieve
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. In my opinion,
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committing should
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authorities
. The essay will discuss these ideas and provide
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relevant answers to
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. Nowadays numerous crimes are offended by criminals in order to achieve their goals or a person who commits by mistake. Most
of
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individuals claim that
authorities
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 of the punishment time.
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, some
people
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. After
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offense
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 they regret
from
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their
crime
. Presently young
people
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troubles
.
Such
 as teenagers and young
people
. Even though women commit crimes, they have babies. I think that the
authorities
 should reduce in the same situation. It can help not to offend
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troubles
 by them. Another reason is that some
people
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occurred
occur
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 on purpose. They deliberate their
crime
 for a long time
although
 they know that it is bad for their life.
In addition
, they know that they ought not to occur these
troubles
. It may be dangerous for someone's life.
According to
crime
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sentences
.
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other
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the
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people
 believe that
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 and courts ought to find another way to reduce
crime
. I am certain that
this
 idea can relieve the situation. Because the person who
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offense
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 will deeply regret her or his trouble after forgiveness from
authorities
. They never commit so as
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troubles
. In conclusion, many
of
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the
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people
 think that criminal punishment should reduce
however
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some
 consider that
authorities
 ought to find another relevant alternative way. I am certain that courts should be
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according to
 crimes. I have tried to relevant answers to the questions.
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