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Some people believe that the higher a product is priced, the more likely it is that people will want to buy it.
To what extent does price influence potential buyers?
What other factors influence people to buy a product?

#people #product #price #influence #buyers #factors
Behavior of the consumers has been studied under research for
last
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 few decades. Various factors affect the
decision making
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 of
people
while
 buying
the
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products
. Pricing is considered as one of the most influential
element
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elements
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 in
this
 regard. Companies
also
 use some other strategies to grab customer's attention like advertisements,
high
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high-quality
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quality
products
 or digital marketing. Nowadays,
people
 like to buy
high priced
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high-priced
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products
 because they think
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of it
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it
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them
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 as
a
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apply
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quality
product
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products
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. It is a general perception that
the
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quality
product
 is always expensive
due to
to
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its
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their
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 high manufacturing cost.
Moreover
, it
is
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also comes
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also
 comes into consideration that high prices
represents
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represent
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 a status symbol.
People
 feel rich by having and showing expensive items.
Furthermore
, different brands use
this
 psychic
behavior
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behaviour
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 of their clients and affiliate them with their
products
.
For example
, Apple company launches the most expensive iPhone and
people
 use to buy them
either
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whether
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 they can afford it or not.
While
 discussing the other factors affecting
decisive
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the decisive
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 strategies of customers, advertisement is
on
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at
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top
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the top
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 of the list. Merchandises manipulate customers by showing attractive ads and
people
 purchase goods whether they need it or not.
For example
, if an advertisement is continuously popping up on our social media accounts, we interestingly watch it and ultimately it developed
interest
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an interest
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 in buying that particular
product
 and we ended up fulfilling our desire to purchase it.
Quality
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The quality
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 of the good is another element that influences the consumer's buying
decision
.
People
 tend to buy
a
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high quality products
a high quality product
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high
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high-quality
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quality
products
either
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whether
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 it is expensive or not. Concluding to
this
, if the
product
 is overpriced
people
 are encouraged to buy that.
However
, it is not the only factor that has an impact
upon
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on
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 customer's
decision making
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decision-making
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. A good advertisement, marketing,
quality
 and goodwill or good reviews
also
 have a great influence on potential consumer's buying
decision
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decisions
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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