Some people believe that it is important to spend a lot of money on family celebration while others think it is waste of money

Family
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is a group
people
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related by blood or by marriage
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the celebration
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is gathering
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celebration
is when you are gathering the whole family to celebrate something special . I Remy years back my aunt's wedding that took place in December it was a festival period which made all of us come down and brought the whole family together because I got to see my uncles and aunties I haven'
t
seen in years time including my grandparents it was so much fun we laughed told jokes and it was a special kind of bond . Some
people
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t
like it because of the
money
involved each family was supposed to contribute a particular amount of
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that
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made it look like u re spending
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unnecessary Because at that time my parents weren'
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Angry about the
money
issues because of our financial state
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because of the
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aspects. Regardless I think
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celebration
is a good idea because we got to see them before
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travelled. Would love to have my own wedding like that I saw the loved and happiness it brought to us
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