The diagram illustrates the number of people in Australia who born in four foreign countries, and percentages of immigrants in 1901, 1954 and 2016.

The diagram  illustrates  the number of people in Australia who born in four foreign countries, and percentages of immigrants in 1901, 1954 and 2016.
The diagram illustrates the
number
of
people
in Australia who were born in four foreign
countries
, and the percentages of
immigrants
in 1901, 1954 and 2016.
overall
. it can be seen that
people
who come from the united kingdom were considerably higher
nonetheless
, in recent years the percentage of UK
immigrants
noticeably decreases due o the rise in the
number
of
immigrants
who came from other
countries
. In 1901,
People
who visited Australia from the United Kingdom ( England) were 495,504 evidently,
this
proportion was more than half of all settlers. In ,comparison
people
from another Western country (Germany) were significantly few (38,352). The
number
of
people
who came from China and New Zealand was similar ( nearly 30
thousand
and nearly 26
thousand
respectively). And, these
people
were 3.5 and 3 per
cent
of all
immigrants
. in 1954,
immigrants
from Western
countries
increased to about 626
thousand
from England and 65
thousand
from Germany, nearly 48% and 5,1% of all
immigrants
.
Whereas
,
people
who came from Southern
countries
(China) witnessed a dramatical decrease of approximately 20
thousand
,
however
, the
number
of
people
who came from New Zealand rose to more than 40
thousand
and it was 3.4 per
cent
of general
immigrants
. In 2016, the
number
of
immigrants
(UK) witnessed an increase of over a million
nevertheless
, the
overall
percentage decreased to 17.7 per
cent
due to
the increasing
number
of
immigrants
from other foreign
countries
.
People
of Germany ( about 100
thousand
), the
number
people
of both Southern
countries
were roughly equal (china) about 500
thousand
and (New Zealand) 518
thousand
. Clearly, These were 8.3 and 8.4 per
cent
of general
immigrants
respectively.
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