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Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication have a negative impact on young people’s writing and reading skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that children's reading and writing abilities are being negatively impacted by the rising usage of computers and mobile phones for
communication
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.I agree with the notion, as there is more to lose with the increasing technology with respect to
communication
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skills
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 Kids have easy access to smartphones and computers enabling them to the world of the
internet
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.
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, the
internet
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 has an abundance of learning material young ones get distracted easily by games and social media.
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, social media aggravates the situation because of the high usage of slang words. To top it off, all new forms of technology use typing tools
instead
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 of the traditional form of writing leading to poor development of writing
skills
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 and vocabulary.
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, the habit of typing in short forms leads to a lot of errors
while
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 writing the IELTS test resulting in a lower band score.
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, having access to the
Internet
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 and utilising it appropriately can help develop a lot of
skills
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and
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especially reading habits. A broad range of vocabulary and concepts can be learned from the
internet
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, it is argued that writing will become obsolete with changes in methods of
communication
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 and one should harness and improve on their typing speed.
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, the rise in programming and coding culture among young people has led to the rise in competition for speed typing. In conclusion, growth in technology is disruptive for some forms of
communication
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skills
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 but, if utilised properly, it can have greater benefits.

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task response
The essay introduces the topic and presents both sides of the argument. However, the conclusion is not effectively tied back to the introduction.
coherence cohesion
The essay shows some organization and development of ideas. However, the introduction and conclusion could be more effectively linked, and the supporting points could be more clearly developed.
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