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nowadys many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization.what might this be the case.what could be the disadvantages of being self-empolyed.

Recently, many
people
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 prefer to be self-employed, rather than to be an employer. It has attracted numerous controversies and drawn the attention
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 the public. Some
people
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 think its advantages outweigh the
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,
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 others do not think so. In my eyes, there are more
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.
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, it has been argued why I think
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disadvantages
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 of being self-employed outweigh the advantages. Admittedly, there are many positive aspects of being a
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.
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, one well-known businessman, Blair White once said"Once you are a
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, you can totally feel the real sense of freedom" In
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, you have more chances than others to be a rich
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people
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.
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, you can build your successful career. It is
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 clearly shown why many
people
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 choose to be self-employed.
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, there are many negative sides
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 being a
boss
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. As far as society is concerned, the ultimate aim of society is to make
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 happy.
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, one recent article published in Nelson Magazine revealed that being a
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 means you have more
pressures
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 on yourself because of more responsibilities.
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, it is quite risky to be broke in
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 bad economic situation.
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, you will surely be a busy person and can not get enough time to spend with your family or friends. There is no doubt that being a
boss
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 brings you more stress, rather than happiness.
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, I hold the view that being a
boss
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 has more
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. In order to address
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 issue, the government and
people
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 should make a concerted effort to find a solution.

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