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Some people say that death penalty is a useful tool for those whoo committed violent crimes. Other people say that tdeath penlaty is uncaccptable in today’s socity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is argued that the death
sentence
 is reasonable in modern society for cruel crimes,
such
 as mass murder or terrorism,
whereas
 others claim it to be
excessively
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 cruel punishment.
This
 essay will discuss both points of view regarding
this
 problem On the one hand, the death
sentence
 seems to be an effective measure for saving money compared to imprisonment. Keeping an individual in
a
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prison is quite expensive and it takes a significant amount of taxpayers funds. Apart from that, some people think that the capital
sentence
 can level up living standards and have a positive effect on the economy.
Although
 some argue that the
sentence
 is a reasonable measure to save taxpayers money, I believe that there is a high chance of
the
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 error of judgement. The human factor may play a vital role in erroneous sentences.
This
 is because making errors is an intrinsic part of every human and in
this
case
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such
 error of judgement will lead to irreversible consequences.
For instance
,
the
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recent research conducted by American Criminal Intelligence Organisation states, that in the
last
 5
years
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 18% of individuals were accused by mistake. In conclusion,
this
 essay shed light on the advantages and disadvantages of
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capital punishment. The death penalty still remains a contentious issue and requires careful consideration of ethical and pragmatic factors.
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