Some people think  that in the modern world we are  more dependent on each other, while others believe we have become more independent. discuss both views and give your opinion

Some
people
said that the more the world moves towards modernity, the more
people
become dependent on each other.
However
, some
people
believe that with the modernization of the world, the level of
dependence
of
people
on each other will decrease. I agree with the second opinion. In the following paragraphs, I will express my opinion
while
stating the reasons. On the one hand, it can be said that with the modernization of the world,
people
become more dependent on each other, in the sense that
today
many
people
can easily communicate with each other, and
as a
result
of that
dependence
is created. With the advancement of technology and the creation of more modern communication tools, as we can see,
people
can easily communicate with each other. Take
today
's mobile phones as an example. A person in a foreign country can easily communicate with someone in a fraction of a second; on the other side of the borders, it is easy to communicate with the Internet connection, and
as a
result
, many long-distance relationships are created in which there is
naturally
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dependence
.
Although
I feel that
this
type of
dependence
is unrealistic and there is no correct definition of
dependence
in
this
concept.
On the other hand
, it can be said that
people
are more independent than before.
Today
, with life conditions becoming more complicated, many
people
spend many hours of their time working, studying, or studying, and
as a
result
, they are less able to spend time with their friends or family.
For example
, consider a family where both husband and wife are forced to work
due to
high living expenses
such
as providing housing, food and clothing, and
as a
result
, they can devote less time to being together, and
as a
result
, they become less dependent on each other.
In addition
, nowadays the concept of independence is very important and many psychologists emphasize independence especially for women and
people
care more about
this
aspect of their personality than before. They become completely independent, they especially tend to be financially independent. In fact, in the past, we saw many
people
around 30 years old or older who still lived with their families and were financially dependent, but
today
many
people
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Younger ages are trying to be independent and I believe
this
trend will continue and we will see more independent
people
every day. In general, I believe that
although
modernization with the increase in the level of technology can in some ways make
people
more dependent than before,
but
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due to
reasons
such
as the complexity of life and the popularization of the concept of independence from a young age,
today
we see an increase in independent
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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