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Nowadays many people choose to be slef employed rather than to work for a company or organisation.why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self employed?

#people #slef #work #company #organisation #be #case #self
Money is an inevitable factor in our life. Now more and more people
are rely
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 on self-employment rather than work for a company or organization.
This
essy
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essay
 analyses the reason for increasing numbers of
self-employment
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self-employed
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 and its downsides. My point of view regarding
abovementioned
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 statement
explained
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 in the following paragraph.
To begin
 with, the
reasons
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reason
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 for
increasing
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the increasing
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 numbers of
entrepreneur
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entrepreneurs
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 is that a few people do not like to work under a organization, because they do not like to obey the rules and regulations they are their own boss.
Moreover
, when they are doing their own
business
 they get freedom. To be clearer, they can take leave their own wish and
also
reshedule
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reschedule
 the meeting
depend
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 up on their convenient time.
In
addition
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business
 man can avoid unnecessary stress caused by coworkers.
For example
, to working
under
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apply
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in a company team work is an important one if they do not
have
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ithave
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, it
increase
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 the workload
thus
, it leads to high pressure from senior staff and
create
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 stress.
However
, there are some demerits
for
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to
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the
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apply
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self-employment. First and foremost one is that, the person
need
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needs
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 to take the whole risk alone, if any crisis
happen
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,
as well as
 to start a new
business
 they need
huge
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 amount of initial investment.
Furthermore
,
those
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for those
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 who are starting
new
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business
 if the person
do
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does
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 not have awareness about the
business
 (how to run) it result
financial
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in financial
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lose
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loss
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.
To sum up
,
although
 there are many reasons for
to start
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starting
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 a
business
such
 as people
get
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getting
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 more freedom
however
, if the person
do
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does
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 not have proper knowledge about
business
 leads to financial
lose
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loss
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.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • entrepreneurship
  • home-based business
  • career autonomy
  • creative freedom
  • economic uncertainty
  • layoffs
  • financial insecurity
  • stress management
  • work-personal life separation
  • professional isolation
  • social interaction
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